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Revenge could be sweet by ~ohBOBlyone:iconohBOBlyone:



He leans his head against the wall,
And wonders if she thinks of him.
Regretting when he let her fall,
Drifting farther; thoughts dim
He hopes to her when she calls.
Calls for help on a whim,
She’s going to make him beg and crawl.
©2004-2009 ~ohBOBlyone
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:iconmonos:
I love this. It's so succinct, something I find difficult, and sinister. It really makes the imagination work. The opening line, in the context of the rest of the piece, really sticks in the mind as almost the only visual clue available. Rhyme and rhythm are so subtle and natural that they don't seem at all contrived. It's really a great work.

-monos

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I think the other guy that commented is making up words to sound smart...

I'm happy because something really cool just happened. Not even your angsty poems can upset me now! HAHHAHAHA! I'm invincible!

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*gasp* thats amazing! and I dunno about the other dude..ahvent read his comment yet...

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:o_o: thanks for the smartness...and thanks for the fav!!!!!=D

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You don't die from a broken heart -
you only wish you did.

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